Some cleanup items for the iSCSI
Naming and Discovery document:
1) Sec.1 p.5 and p. 14 define "iSCSI
Address" but contradict each other. p. 5 defines it as simply and
IP address [& port] and p. 14 says it's the iSCSI name and IP addr
[+port]. Paragraph 5 needs to be modified to match p.
14.
2) Sec. 1 p. 17
says
In this example, Robert's SSN is like the iSCSI
Name, his phone number and addresses are analogous to the TCP addresses
which make up an iSCSI session, and "Robert Smith" would be a human-friendly
label for this person.
The statement that Robert Smith's addresses are like an iSCSI session
makes no sense to me. An iSCSI session is a relationship between two
separate iSCSI nodes. Robert's addresses are only one end of the
relationship. Perhaps this paragraph means to say his phone number,
etc. are like an iSCSI nodes TCP addresses?
3) Sec. 1.1 p. 1 first sentence "iSCSI has given the Organizational naming authority additional
flexibility by permitting it to hand out local naming authority
to
subordinate organizations."
I
suggest changing this to "The iSCSI naming scheme was constructed to give an
organizational naming authority the flexibility to further subdivide the
responsibility for name creation to subordinate naming authorities."
Use of "capital O" in Organization implies there's some globally defined
naming authority that this sentence is referring to.
4)
General comment on section 1.1 To reflect the definition in the iSCSI
main draft, sec. 2.2.6.3.2, either the examples need to be changed to
show the ":" after the reversed domain name in the string, or the text needs
to be changed to say that these substrings are sub-domain
names.
5)sec. 1.1, p 15 - this example is missing the ":" following the
reversed domain name.
6)sec. 3, p 1 - the last sentence is missing something.
It's "Moreover, iSCSI
discovery mechanism only deals with target discovery and one still
needs to use the SCSI protocol for LUN discovery." and should be "Moreover, the iSCSI discovery
mechanisms listed here only deal with target discovery and one still
needs to use the SCSI protocol for LUN
discovery."
7) sec. 3
p 2 - 2nd sentence is missing something. It's "The goal of iSCSI discovery mechanism is to provide low
overhead support for small iSCSI setups, and scalable discovery solutions
for large enterprise setups." and should be "The
goal of iSCSI discovery mechanisms are to provide low overhead support
for small iSCSI setups, and scalable discovery solutions for large
enterprise setups."
8) sec. 3, p
5 the
sentence "This mechanism assumes that the
IP address and TCP port information are already available to the initiator." is
missing something, should be "This mechanism assumes that the
target's IP address and TCP port information are already available to
the initiator."
9)
appendix B.3, I think there's a typo in the first sentence. "This gateway presents logical
targets (iSCSI Names) to the initiators, and maps them to real iSCSI targets
as it chooses." should be "This gateway presents
logical targets (iSCSI Names) to the initiators, and maps them to SCSI
targets as it chooses."
10)
appendix B.4 another typo? "An iSCSI proxy is a
SCSI gateway..." should be "An iSCSI proxy is an
iSCSI gateway.."
11) appendix
B.5, p 4 refers to a "DMZ" There is no definition of this term in this
document. Needs to either be defined or substitute some more
descriptive phrase here.
Regards,
Marjorie
Krueger
Networked Storage Architecture
Networked Storage
Solutions
Hewlett-Packard
